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Separate, encased in a crystal tower;
Winds lifted her above His reach
For another hour.

She could not escape from her jail,
And did lie in wait for her Knight-
Hearty and hale.

But no white flanks shone along the horizon
No shield, nor banner
No silvered visor.

Yet the Lady lingered, the breeze her breath,
For a savior to rescue her
From her distress.

Since even the zephyrs
Could not loose
The knowledge of her fatal noose.

An invisible thread
Unending and strong
Coiled within: so terribly long.

The Lady’s skin glowed, candlelit pale;
See the delicate tracery,
Blue beneath the veil?

At times the currents would shift their wend
Her lips would move
Anticipating the end.

But the wind would keep blowing
The Lady would gasp,
Her body still free of the Ferryman’s grasp.

And so it went
For several hours more
Until night fell upon her cold marble floor.

In the descending gloom
Her eyes glimpsed a shape
Traveling as a man would, with confident gait.

O’er rock and tree swept a shadow
Past waters turgid
Fields spent and fallow.

A smile a-lighted upon her face
Unexpected and faint,
Yet full of grace.

Here was the comfort she had sought! -
He would show her worry
Was all for naught.

Tis true
She is the damsel of this tale
But even heroes must sometimes fail.

Once the man-shade reached her side
She spied his collar
And simply cried.

The Lady did not wish to concede her fight
Death should not win
Before dawn’s light.

But her body knew
It could not stay
Alive in this world another day.

It thanked the Lady
For oh-so-many years
Of laughter, comfort, happiness, and tears.

She felt the thread tighten
Cross her laboring heart
Realized she had played a glorious part.

Upon wingèd words
Holy and sure
Death approached ready to carry her.

And when the priest’s hand
Enclosed her own
She curled her fingers round ancient bone.

The Lady did not shy away from Him;
The wind died
And with it, her will to live.
©2009 ~mreid973
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If Tennyson's "The Lady of Shalott" lay dying in an ICU.

I am in the process of editing this. Suggestions are very much encouraged. Thank you.

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:iconwickedlyloquacious:
Awesome way to take an old piece and bring it up to date. It's a fascinating inspiration you took. Nicely done.

And welcome to the WLC! We'll be looking forward to seeing more from you. :)

- *WickedlyLoquacious

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:iconshadowedacolyte:
I appreciate what you did here...but I must confess I'm not a fan. It's still too "ye eld englyshe" for any sort of modern appreciation (unless perhaps a dissection of the style or with some other overall point, which doesn't exist here), and I don't feel like the setting upgrade adds/changes enough to the original to earn its keep, so to speak, as a stand alone poem.

What were your aims in writing this?

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Everywhere I go I'm asked if the universities stifle writers. My opinion is that they don't stifle enough of them. There's many a best seller that could have been prevented by a good teacher. --Flannery O'Connor
:iconmreid973:
The inspiration has a completely different interpretation, though. For all that this poem was poorly done, I intended it to suggest that each life should be remembered. And through the struggles near the end, an individual can become a hero, albeit in a different way than he or she pictured.

I did not have any aims as such. It is an experiment.

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"Imagination is a quality given a man to compensate him for what he is not, and a sense of humour was provided to console him for what he is." — Oscar Wilde

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